Monday, September 19, 2016

Butcher Baker Blurbs and other covers I don't like

Working on blurbs. Hurray for challenges.

Violetta Tancetta is ready to don her twin brother’s suit and tie, and take his place in an elite Private Boy’s school for his last year at high school.

Violetta is an overachiever who has never turned down a challenge and even after her parents were slaughtered in a freak tiger attack, she’s going to save her brother’s future whether he wants her to or not.

Eighteen-year-old, Violetta Tancetta has no idea that the school isn’t only for rich, prissy boys, but also the premier training ground for the next generation of Butchers, or those trained to slaughter vampires, werewolves, and anything else that goes bump in the night.

There, she gains the friendship and respect of the greatest Butcher of them all, wickedly handsome Orion who constantly threatens to unmask her male persona.






Or...
Violetta Tancetta has no idea that the streets of the city where she lives teem with werewolves, vampires, and zombies at night. All she knows is that her twin brother is throwing away his future when he decides to drop out of the elite all boy school he’s been attending, and she isn’t going to let him do it, even if it means taking his place.

Violetta is an overachiever who has never turned down a challenge. Despite losing her parents in a freak tiger attack, she’s going to save her brother’s future whether he wants her to or not.

Eighteen-year-old, Violetta Tancetta has no idea that the school isn’t only for rich, prissy boys, but also the premier training ground for the next generation of Butchers, or those trained to slaughter vampires, werewolves, and anything else that goes bump in the night.

Her plans get complicated when she gains the friendship and respect of the greatest Butcher of them all, wickedly handsome Orion who constantly threatens the security of her male identity.


Which do you prefer?

2 comments:

  1. Second one, explains the key points better, brother drops out - sister takes his place to save his future - she has guts - school for butchers...
    The last line suggests Orion knows she's a girl though? ^____^

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  2. Thanks so much for the feedback! I will go with that one, and revise it a bit. Orion is so dreamy, she can't help but want to kiss him and THAT would certainly threaten her identity. :D Also, he's not an idiot and he notices after a while that she's missing an Adam's apple. Thanks for the feedback Princess!

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